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Re: Please... Could somebody check my english text ?
Patricio Armijo 2005-Jul-02 19:03:00
Thanks for yours comments.
I have included all yours suggestions.
Best regards,
Patricio Armijo
--- In #removed#, "rcrowest" <#removed#> wrote:
> --- In #removed#, "Patricio Armijo" <#removed#> wrote:
> > Please...
> > Could somebody check my english text ?
> > My pano is posted at:
> > http://128.32.102.88:8090/gen/view/wwp605/html/PatricioArmijo.html
>
> Nice panorama! Here's your original English text and an amended
> version - please feel free to pick and choose from my suggestions, or
> ignore them altogether - as the saying goes, a picture's worth a
> thousand words!
>
> Original:
>
> The Water, one element loaded of symbolics, life, transparency, purity.
>
> In our daily life, without doubt one familiar place... I chose this
> site, since it keeps a strong bond with the Water.
> In general, I like to construct the panoramas without including
> people, but this time I made an exception. Because the concepts of
> life and purity are better represented by my little girl.
>
> All this week has been very rainy, included photography day... It`s a
> Great Coincidence with the Subject.
>
> Suggested:
>
> Water, an element loaded with symbolism, life, transparency and purity.
>
> In our daily life, this is undoubtedly a familiar place... I chose
> this location as it has a strong link with Water.
> In general, I like to make panoramas without including people, but
> this time I made an exception, because the concepts of life and purity
> are better represented by my little girl.
>
> All this week has been very rainy, including photography day... a
> great coincidence with the theme.