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Re: Does this make sense?
Bjørn K Nilssen 2007-Sep-27 19:08:00
On 26 Sep 2007 at 8:11, Caroling Geary wrote:
> I like it. I think I know what you are thinking, that is, I'm
> guessing. But it might not make sense to a visitor unless you say
> "WHY" something fits the theme.
>
> You have two periods after sentences that aren't questions. If you
> want to indicate trailing, unfinished thought, I think it should be
> like this. ...
> A sequence is three periods.
> Otherwise one period will do.
Thanks a lot! It was a good help :)
How about that group of kite surfers - are they also sustained by their kites?
> I might rewrite your paragraph something like this:
>
> Although they are exposed in the sand, the roots reach for water and
> soil, providing sustenance for the trees.
>
> A group of kite surfers out on the sea sustain joy from their sport.
>
> The sea itself is the biggest source of sustenance in the world,
> maybe except for the earth itself?
>
> The bridges in the background support transport of our sustenance.
>
> The more I look, the more I find sustenance is a word with a very
> wide meaning.
>
>
>
> On Sep 26, 2007, at 6:54 AM, Bj?rn K Nilssen wrote:
>
> > I find the word sustenance quite difficult. It seems to be able to
> > cover almost anything
> > if you think about it?
> > I was wondering if I could get a little feedback on my submission -
> > if the text makes
> > sense at all?
> > http://128.32.102.88:8090/gen/live_preview/wwp907/html/
> > BjornKareNilssen.html
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